This week was better as I have now refined my essay question as I was finding when writing the essay previously that I was just making general points where my new topic of branding within football allows my essay to be more focused. The feedback I received in response to the paragraph I wrote was that my writing was well structure and included relevant examples which backed up my points well. However the peer assessor felt as if my opening sentence could be more engaging and I needed to reference more of my examples. In addition to this we also had to bring in two images to analyse in a paragraph we wrote in lesson. My paragraph was about the San Jose Earthquakes or Quakers image. "The image shows the new style of branding for the San Jose Earthquakes. The original team moved in 2006 to become Houston Dynamo, however the badge and colours remained property of San Jose. To avoid being the same as the previous team, whilst maintaining the original identity, the club undertook a makeover."
